Picture Book Assessments

Written a picture book and need some professional feedback?

Not ready for a picture book mentorship?

If so, then my picture book manuscript assessments are just the ticket.

Having reviewed hundreds of picture books over the years, I know there’s not one ‘secret ingredient’ that makes a picture book a classic.

I also understand how hard it is to submit your work for scrutiny, being an author myself. This is why I treat your work with respect and provide honest, professional feedback that will help you to develop your writing.

Children's author Each picture book assessment includes a condisered evaluation of the:

manuscript’s use of language
overall story
appeal to the intended audience
unique elements of the story
way illustrations could enhance the story
potential appeal to publishers.

I also suggest next steps, which might include texts to read and study or how to approach a publisher (if it’s ready for submission).

Picture book assessments start at $199.

So, what are you waiting for?

Book a Picture Book Assessment today.

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